Good News - Blaga vest - Frohe Botschaft - Part-11

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And Israel sacrificed fat sacrifices, burned precious offerings, prayed the prescribed [appointed] prayers, all in expectation of that inimitable [incomparable] savior whom John the Baptist in Aenon near to Salim foretold, saying: “Prepare [ye] the way of the Lord [;] and make his paths straight!”
And behold, the Scripture was fulfilled.
He came during the reign of Octavian Augustus.
This is the [true] tale [story] about him, his teaching and his disciples, his miracles and his suffering [passion]. This is the [true] tale of how his new kingdom above all kingdoms was born. And it was evening and it was morning. And it was Joshua ben Joseph, Jesus the Nazarene, Savior of the world.
Who knows on which day, every day.

A Izrailj je gojne žrtve žrtvovao, skupocene paljenice palio, propisane molitve molio, sve u očekivanju tog neuporedivog izbavitelja, koga je Jovan Krstitelj u Enonu blizu Salima najavljivao govoreći: „Pripravite put Gospodu i poravnajte staze njegove!“
I gle, Pismo se zbi. Za vlade cezara Oktavijana Avgusta, On dođe.
Ovo je pripovest o Njemu, Njegovom učenju i učenicima, Njegovim čudima i Njegovom stradanju. Ovo je pripovest o tome kako se rađalo Njegovo Novo carstvo nad carstvima.
I bi veče, i bi jutro. I bi Jošua ben Josif, Isus Nazarećanin, Spasitelj sveta.
Dan ko zna koji, dan svaki.

Und Israel opferte fette/feiste Opfer, verbrannte wertvolle Gaben, betete vorgeschriebene Gebete, alles in Erwartung dieses unvergleichlichen Erlösers, den Johannes der Täufer in Enon, nahe bei Salim, mit den Worten ankündigt: „Bereitet den Weg des Herrn und ebnet seine Pfade!“
Und siehe da, die Schrift war erfüllt. Er kam während der Herrschaft des Octavian Augustus.
Dies ist die Geschichte über ihn, seine Lehre und seine Jünger, seine Wunder und seine Leiden. Dies ist die Geschichte, wie sein neues Reich über alle Königreiche geboren wurde. Und es wurde Abend und wurde Morgen. Und es war Joshua ben Joseph, Jesus der Nazarener, der Retter der Welt.
Wer weiß, an welchem ​​Tag, jeden Tag.

Vladimir D. Janković:

The word „pripovest“ Pekić uses twice. With no adjective. Our distinguished translator made a reasonable variation – tale/story. What's more, he added the adjective „true“, hoping that the whole would seem more assertive, more adamant. I suggest that we should leave it with no adjective, just like Pekić did it, and use the same word twice. The word should be tale. There is, though, another possibly intriguing option: narrative. But narrative is too modern, too Latin, too written. So, the tale would be fine.

Good News - Blaga vest - Frohe Botschaft - Part-10

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And thus, instructed by the Lord, the prophet Isaiah said [to them]: “Hear ye now, O house of David; is it not enough for you to try the patience of men, but will ye weary my God also? Therefore, the Lord Himself will give you a sign: Behold, a virgin shall conceive, and bear a son, Immanuel”

["Hear ye now, O house of David; it is a small thing for you to weary men, but will ye weary my God also? Therefore the Lord himself will give you a sign; Behold, a virgin shall conceive, and bear a son, and shall call his name Emmanuel."]

And the prophet Isaiah again spoke: “He will be despised and rejected by men, experience pain and will be familiar with sickness, like someone from whom people hide their faces; He will be despised, and we won't value Him. Yet He will take upon himself our suffering and carry our sorrows, but we will think that God wounded him, beat him, and punished him. And He will be wounded for our rebellious acts, and beaten for our transgressions; He will be punished so that we can have peace, and we will receive healing from his wounds.”

[He is despised and rejected of men; a man of sorrows, and acquainted with grief; and we hid as it were our faces from him; he was despised, and we esteemed him not. Surely he hath borne our griefs, and carried our sorrows; yet we did esteem him stricken, smitten of God, and afflicted. But he was wounded for our transgressions, he was bruised for our iniquities; the chastisement of our peace was upon him; and with his stripes we are healed."]

I stoga im, poučen od Gospoda, kaza prorok Isaije: „Slušaj sada, dome Davidov, malo li vam je što dosađujete ljudima, nego dojadiste i Bogu mojemu. Zato će vam [sam] Gospod dati znak: eto, devojka će zatrudneti i roditi sina Emanuila [rodiće sina, i nadjenuće mu ime Emanuilo].“

I još kaza prorok Isaije: „Prezren će biti i odbačen među ljudima, bolnik i vičan bolestima, i kao neko od koga svako zaklanja lice, prezren da ga nizašta nećemo uzimati. A on će bolesti naše poneti, i nemoći naše uzeti na sebe, a mi ćemo misliti da je ranjen i da ga Bog bije i kinji. Ali on će biti ranjen za naše prestupe, i bijen za naša bezakonja; kazna na njemu biće našeg mira radi, i njegovom ranom mi ćemo se isceliti.“

Und so, beauftragt/angewiesen durch den Herrn, sprach der Prophet Jesaja: „Höre doch, Haus Davids: Ist's euch zu wenig, dass ihr den Menschen zur Last fallt? Müßt ihr auch meinen Gott ermüden? Darum wird euch der HERR selbst ein Zeichen geben: Siehe, eine Jungfrau wird schwanger und einen Sohn, Immanuel gebären.“

Und der Prophet Jesaja sagte weiter: „Verachtet wird er sein und verlassen von den Menschen, ein Mann der Schmerzen und mit Krankheit vertraut; wie einer, vor dem man das Angesicht verbirgt, so verachtet wird er sein, und wir werden seiner nicht achten. Doch wahrlich, unsere Krankheit wird er tragen, und unsere Schmerzen wird er auf sich laden; wir aber werden ihn für bestraft halten, von Gott geschlagen und geplagt; aber er wird durchbohrt um unserer Übertretung willen, zerschlagen wegen unserer Missetat; die Strafe, uns zum Frieden, wird auf ihm liegen, und durch seine Wunden werden wir geheilt.“

Good News - Blaga vest - Frohe Botschaft - Part-9

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It must have been that the Israelites, spoiled by God's benevolence [favors], didn't think much of [hold greatly to] mere [empty] promises, and that they, whilst battling [fighting in the meantime] with [their] infidel neighbors [, the unbelievers], demanded something reliable [more definite], some physical [bodily], irrefutable [irrevocable] sign of heavenly care [favor].

Mora biti da Izrailjci, razmaženi božjim milodarima, nisu mnogo držali do pukih obećanja, i da su, mlateći se u međuvremenu s neverničkim susedima, zahtevali nešto pouzdano, neki telesno neopozivi znak nebeske brige.

Es ist möglich das die Israeliten, von Gottes Wohlwollen verwöhnt, nicht viel von bloßen Versprechungen hielten, und dass sie, während den Prügeleien mit Ungläubigen Nachbarn, etwas zuverlässiges, ein physisches, unwiderlegbares Zeichen der himmlischen Fürsorge verlangten.

Vladimir D. Janković:

Benevolence may be the best solution. There are other options: charity, or almsgiving. Those two words are closer to the original if we opt for a rigid approach. But milodar is not the same as milostinja; it is more a gift than something we give to a beggar. So, benevolence isn’t bad at all. Although, this almsgiving might be tempting, too…

… and that they, wilst… Yes, I think there should be this that they, by all means. Otherwise there’d be a confusion, I guess.

Battling is better than fighting in the meantime, and the other alternative solutions are plausible, as well (reliable, physical, irrefutable).

… sign of heavenly care. – Maybe it could be heavenly concern? Or, better, heavenly attention? Even heavenly care itself isn’t bad. I’d say we shouldn’t change it.

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Israel, luckily [by good fortune], had not been [wasn't] condemned to lifelong suffering. The prophets, the angry interpreters of the gods, had prophesied a better fate: Hear, O Israel, — they sayeth [said], — God, who bestowed upon [gave] you Amram's [his adopted] foundling Moses to deliver you from the enslaved body [to free you from captivity of the body], will give you his only-begotten son to deliver [free] you from sin, the yoke [bondage] of the soul. And he will not be one of those false saviors which all peoples have at all times. His kingdom will not be of this but of another [that] world, and in his hand[s] he will not hold a sword but an olive branch!

Izrailj, srećom, ne beše osuđen na doživotnu patnju. Proroci, gnevni tumači bogova, prorekoše mu bolju sudbinu: Čuj, Izrailju, — govorahu oni. — Bog ti je darovao Amramovo [Avramovo] posvojče Mojsija da te izbavi iz ropstva tela, daće ti i sina svog jedinorodnoga da te izbavi iz greha, jarma duše. I neće to biti jedan od prevarnih [prevarenih] spasitelja, koje imaju u svim vremenima svi narodi. Njegovo carstvo neće biti od ovog, nego od onog sveta, i u ruci neće držati mač, već grančicu maslinovu!

Israel, zum Glück, wurde nicht zum lebenslangen Leiden verurteilt. Die Propheten, die wütenden Dolmetscher der Götter, hatten ein besseres Schicksal prophezeit: Höre, Israel, — sagten sie. — Gott, der euch Amrams Findling Moses schenkte um euch vom versklavten Körper zu erlösen, wird euch seinen eingeborenen Sohn geben, um euch von der Sünde zu erlösen, das Joch der Seele. Und es wird nicht einer der betrügerischen Erlöser sein, die alle Völker zu allen Zeiten haben. Sein Reich wird nicht von dieser sondern von jener Welt sein, und in seiner Hand wird er nicht das Schwert, sondern einen Olivenzweig halten!

Vladimir D. Janković:

Bestowed upon is great, I think.

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This is what's written in the Serbian original: ... 
 da te izbavi iz ropstva tela, daće ti i sina svog jedinorodnoga da te izbavi iz greha, jarma duše.
BODY is what makes him a slave, BODY is his tyrant, and he is its slave who is about to be delivered (ropstvo tela, the slavery of the body).

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Deliver, deliver – Pekić uses this verb twice, I don’t see why we should change it… So, this would be: … his only-begotten son to deliver you from sin, this yoke of the soul. Yes, I believe that this yoke is convenient, too.

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False saviors – This option is not bad at all. There are some other possibilities – fraudulent or deceptive, for instance – but false seems better to me. If we have to opt for a different solution, deceptive is more convincing than fraudulent.

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And scattered She was (they were) [They would be scattered] to the four corners of the earth [world] like [as the] indestructible ash of some [very] ancient primal myth of suffering; a myth whose episodes are [were] still to be enumerated and whose end is still to be conceived [still isn't known].

I razvejan bi na četiri strane sveta kao neuništivi pepeo neke prastare uzor-legende o stradanju; legende čije epizode još nisu izređane i čiji kraj još nije zamišljen.

Und verstreut in die vier Ecken der Erde, wie die unverwüstliche Asche eines uralten Mythos des Leidens; ein Mythos, dessen Folgen noch ungewiss sind und dessen Ende noch unbekannt ist.

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Interesting reference: For nearly 2,000 years, religious Jews have faced the city of Jerusalem three times daily and chanted the following prayer: 

Sound the great trumpet for our freedom, Raise the banner for gathering our exiles, And gather us together from THE FOUR CORNERS OF THE EARTH into our own land.

Vladimir D. Janković:

I have to ask: why a people should be – She? I don't say it's not correct, no; on the contrary, it's very intriguing, inspiring. But, why? And – let's quote Sir Lawrence and Rabbi Dustin – is it safe?

... and scattered It/She/the people was to the four corners of the world as if It/She was the indestructible ash of some ancient primal myth of suffering; a myth whose episodes are still to be listed, and whose end is still to be conceived.

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1) Yes, earth is in the Bible references... It's earth, not world.

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2) Ancient primal myth is fine – only there shouldn't be this dash between primal and myth.

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3) Enumerated is valid, absolutely. The option listed looks somewhat modern, but it's also more neutral, less mathematical. Itemized is too businesslike, particularized is too statistical or scientific.

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4) ... and whose end is still to be conceived... – great solution, shouldn't be changed. 

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Why he chose the tribes of Ivrim [the Hebrews] upon whom to wreak [pour out] his almighty favor, they themselves [he himself] couldn't explain; and the misfortunes that [which] followed [accompanied] them [from that time on] since wherever they went, seemed to bear witness that the most powerful of friends is above all [also] the greatest bearer of evil. Borne [Led] out of Noah's litter [stock], thrown into Egyptian slavery and drawn from it [that as] like raw suet [is] thrown on the fire to soften [clarify it], [the people of] Israel was [were to be] sent into Canaan with the solemn [unambiguous] promise that, after [they had] subjugated [it], they would find their peace in that land [country].

Like hell they did [they didn't]!

Zašto je odabrao baš pleme Ivrim da na njemu iskali svoju previšnju naklonost, to ni ono ne može da objasni; a nevolje koje su ga od tada sledile kud god bi krenulo kao da svedoče da su najmoćniji prijatelji mahom i najzlonosniji. Izveden iz Nojevog nakota, bačen u misirsko ropstvo, pa iz njega izvađen kao što se sirov loj baca na vatru da omekša, Izrailj bi poslat u Hanan s nedvosmislenim obećanjem da će, pošto ga pokori, u toj zemlji naći svoj mir.

Đavola ga je našao!

Warum er die Stämme der Hebräer erkoren hatte, sie mit seiner Allerhöchsten Zuneigung zu verheeren, konnten sie selbst nicht erklären; und das Unglück, das sie von diesem Zeitpunkt an überallhin verfolgte, schien zu bezeugen, dass vor allem der mächtigste Freund der gemeingefährlichste [größte Träger des Bösen] ist. Entsprossen von Noahs Wurf, versklavt in Ägypten und herausgelöst [in die ägyptische Sklaverei geworfen und extrahiert], wie Hammelfett auf dem Feuer erweicht, wurde Israel mit dem eindeutigen Versprechen nach Kanaan gesandt, das, nachdem überwältigt, sie in diesem Land ihren Frieden finden würden.

Zum Teufel damit; sie fanden ihn nicht!


Vladimir D. Janković:

Why he chose the tribes of the Hebrews upon whom to unleash [pour out] his almighty benevolence [favor], he himself couldn't explain… 

Hebrews could be Ivrim, alright? The option with benevolence is undoubtedly acceptable. I just have a suggestion: maybe we could try with „… upon whom to wreak his almighty favor…“ There is some fierce parody, as Radomir Smiljanić would say, in its very melody.

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… and the misfortunes which from here on (out) followed [accompanied] them [from that time on] wherever they went, 

… and the misfortunes that followed them since wherever they went... 

A simpler option. 

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… seemed to bear witness that the most powerful of friends are [is] above all [also] the greatest bearer of evil.

…seemed to bear witness that the most powerful friends are mainly the most evilburdened ones. 

When we say evilburdened, we express compassion and benevolence towards those tormented friends. They do bear evil, but they might not bear it as a willingly chosen token of power, but as a gruesome burden. 

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Stemming from [Led out of] Noah's paltry litter ... 

I think litter is sufficient, can’t see the purpose of paltry. Maybe I’m wrong, of course. 

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 … thrown into Egyptian slavery and extracted, like throwing raw suet onto fire to soften, [and drawn from that as raw suet is thrown on the fire to clarify it], the people of Israel were to be sent into Canaan with the unequivocal [unambiguous] promise that, after they had subjugated it, they would find their peace in that country. 

I would say: … thrown into Egyptian slavery then liberated, like a crude tallow thrown into

fire to mellow, the people of Israel were sent to Canaan with an unambiguous promise that, after they had subjugated it… 

The letter play tallow-mellow attracts attention: it maybe has no deeper meaning, but it has a charm. 

Any such promise should certainly be unambiguous, because the adjective unequivocal bear something insided, something intimate; it is not obligating, but contemplative. 

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 The sentence „Đavola ga je našao!“ shoud be reconsidered, also. Look at that thunderous Zum Teufel damit: that’s the music for a warrior’s ears! English version – „Like hell they did“ – looks like extracted from The Sex and the City. Borislav’s own „Đavola ga je našao!“ is more peoplish, if I put it right; this sentence you can seldom hear on a marketplace. So, I would accentuate the One-whose-name-should-not-be-mentioned: „The Devil, that is what they found!“

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Between the red-rusty caverns of Idumaea and the dun-colored [grey] plateau of Aram; between the limp Jordan basin and the Mediterranean; from the seven-faceted [the challenge is to make a sensible connection to the idea of  "...1st millennium CE Jewish scholars developed an elaborate system of Seven Heavens"], dense and low (hanging) heavens, to the rolling land of yellow groves, yellow dunes and yellow fields, stretches lazily Eretz Israel, which Jehovah gave to his favored people to occupy. [Eretz Israel, which Jehovah gave as a possession to his favored people, lazily stretched between the rust-colored caverns of Idumaea and the gray plateau of Aram, between the fertile Jordan basin and the Mediterranean, from the dense, low heavens to the rolling land of yellow groves, yellow caverns and yellow fields under the plow.]

Između rđastih pešteri Idumeje i sure aramske visoravni, između mlitavog sliva Jordana i Sredozemlja, od sedmolikog, gustog i niskog neba do grbavog tla žutih gajeva, žutih peščara i žutih oranica, prostire se leno Erek Jisrael, koji je Jahve dao u pritežanje svom narodu-mezimcu.

Zwischen den rot-rostigen Höhlen von Idumaea und der dunfarbenen Hochebene von Aram; zwischen dem schlaffen Flussbett des Jordan und dem Mittelmeer; aus den dichten und tief hängenden Sieben Himmeln zu den rollenden Hügeln und gelben Hainen, gelben Dünen und gelben Felder, erstreckt sich träge Eretz Israel, das Jehova seinem bevorzugten Volk zu Beherrschung (über)gab.

Vladimir D. Janković:

Those rust-colored caverns first. Yes, the standard translation for the word pešter is cave, or cavern, but when did you see a rust-coloured (rđasta) cavern? It’s always dark in a cave, so any red, rusty nuance just cannot dominate in such places... Altough, it’s Idumaea, not Western or Southwestern Serbia, for instance, where caves are deep gray, black-green, echoing with sounds of water.

So, the rust-colored pešters should be rust-colored ravines; yes, these are ravines, they can be seen from outside, they are not hidden from the Sun.

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Dun-colored... Great solution. It evokes a desert (dune). Let’s leave it as it is.

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Limp Jordan basin... Well, what about bedridden Jordan basin? Pure madness.

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Why not seven-faceted, pregnant, low skies? There is some Alabamian ambiance in it, what do you say? With Skynard plane falling from those pregnant, low skies?

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I would put dunes, as a connection with dun-colored.

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Stretches lazily – good.

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…which Jehovah gave to his favored people to control/rule. 
It could be like this: ... which Jehovah bestowed to his beloved people to govern.